6:41 - 6:43
As long as you can live through this, you will become an obedient child. (a good boy who listens is kinda repetitive)
7:06
The young master of the Xiang family is indeed gifted.
7:14
You, go and reinforce some of his chains.
7:16
Special subjects deserve special treatment. (experimented, again, is kinda of repetitive since we know Shaoyu's been experimented on at this point. Besides, without experimented, the sentence flows better I think.)
7:38
This is your only opportunity. Get Shi Lan out of here.
7:56
A Ghost Manipulation Pill controls men as if they were ghosts.
7:58
...without complaint. (There was an ellipsis instead of a full stop on the end of that sentence.)
8:43
It's...it's the Immortality Pill!
13:01
Are there any missing details that I haven't thought of?