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Season 5 Episode 32 Proofreading
« on: April 19, 2017, 01:00:46 AM »
Draft video: https://youtu.be/DvxF5xX0wVk

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I usually do the subs with a raw episode. Here are the texts, which should have been on the screen:

[07:52] Yu Ziqi of Mt. Shu

[16:00] Note: Tianzhao (天照) means "Heavenly Light."

I'll add the texts in another video file later and upload it as the final draft.

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Re: Season 5 Episode 32 Proofreading
« Reply #1 on: April 19, 2017, 04:45:24 AM »
Episode 32 Corrections:

5:16 - Although not required, I think "experimented men" would be better as "experimental subjects" or simply "experiments"
5:38 - same as above
5:54 - ... same
7:18 - same -_-
7:39 - "you have the only opportunity"
7:59 -  (you know the drill)

Overall, it looked really good

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Re: Season 5 Episode 32 Proofreading
« Reply #2 on: April 19, 2017, 11:51:50 PM »
I chose between "experimental subjects" and "experiments" based on the timing (or whatever I did, haha). Thank you!

For now, I'll make a note to change "experimental men" to "subjects etc" in the previous episodes too.

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Re: Season 5 Episode 32 Proofreading
« Reply #3 on: April 20, 2017, 06:00:45 AM »
6:41 - 6:43
As long as you can live through this, you will become an obedient child. (a good boy who listens is kinda repetitive)

7:06
The young master of the Xiang family is indeed gifted.

7:14
You, go and reinforce some of his chains.

7:16
Special subjects deserve special treatment. (experimented, again, is kinda of repetitive since we know Shaoyu's been experimented on at this point. Besides, without experimented, the sentence flows better I think.)

7:38
This is your only opportunity. Get Shi Lan out of here.

7:56
A Ghost Manipulation Pill controls men as if they were ghosts.

7:58
...without complaint. (There was an ellipsis instead of a full stop on the end of that sentence.)

8:43
It's...it's the Immortality Pill!

13:01
Are there any missing details that I haven't thought of?

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Re: Season 5 Episode 32 Proofreading
« Reply #4 on: April 20, 2017, 10:24:15 PM »
7:14
You, go and reinforce some of his chains.

Oh, you must know some Chinese! I was going to put "you" there too, but since flycrane01 originally had it like that, I thought it was okay anyway. xD

I did change it though, since I wasn't the only one who was thinking the same.

Thank you so much for proofreading 3 episodes! I'm so happy!!!! xDDD If you have been watching the previous episodes, I hope nothing was off... 8D But you're always welcome to post those, and if it's easier, just post them at the main topic that we always use to notify each other.