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Season 5 Episode 39 Proofreading
« on: May 25, 2017, 11:57:46 PM »
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Re: Season 5 Episode 39 Proofreading
« Reply #1 on: May 26, 2017, 07:21:31 AM »
4:44 - I think "All soldiers, prepare yourselves" works better
11:00 - i suggest replacing "ways" with "methods"
13:18 - "... Human Clan will have no value"
15:29 - "...win against her"

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Re: Season 5 Episode 39 Proofreading
« Reply #2 on: May 27, 2017, 07:26:54 AM »
Episode 39 looks okay to me.
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