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Season 5 Episode 38 Proofreading
« on: May 18, 2017, 11:50:35 AM »
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Re: Season 5 Episode 38 Proofreading
« Reply #1 on: May 19, 2017, 06:51:27 AM »
9:37
Do not use "brother" so sparingly.

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Re: Season 5 Episode 38 Proofreading
« Reply #2 on: May 19, 2017, 05:56:11 PM »
2:09 - has already set out
5:22 - doesn't mean you can talk...
6:40 - but I didn't know...
7:15 - this would still happen
9:22 - the calluses on his steady hands indicate
9:38 - "sparingly" means to not do something often. I think it should be replaced by "lightly" because he is telling him to not use the term so casually
12:44 - blinded by the fury
15:28 - just a bait

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Re: Season 5 Episode 38 Proofreading
« Reply #3 on: May 20, 2017, 02:45:14 AM »
9:38 - "sparingly" means to not do something often. I think it should be replaced by "lightly" because he is telling him to not use the term so casually
Alright, I changed it to "lightly" I didn't have to write this, but I thought it'll be a quick note anyway. xD

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